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 In Weston, Massachusetts, across the Charles River from Brandeis University, an
-unusual structure rises among the trees; a forty foot stone tower, complete
+unusual structure rises among the trees; a forty foot stone tower, complete with
-with spiral staircase and ramparts, weathered and stained with time, looking
+spiral staircase and ramparts, weathered and stained with time, looking
 distinctly out of place within earshot of I-95. The story of how it came to be
-there involves Vikings, a baking soda magnate, the discovery of America, and,
+there involves Vikings, a baking soda magnate, the discovery of America, and, at
-at the center of it all, the city of Norumbega. As one explores the area, the
+the center of it all, the city of Norumbega. As one explores the area, the name
-name comes up again and again: a map will tell you the structure's name is
+comes up again and again: a map will tell you the structure's name is Norumbega
-Norumbega Tower, and running alongside is Norumbega Road. Further south, one
+Tower, and running alongside is Norumbega Road. Further south, one finds a
-finds a Norumbega Park, and another road called Norumbega Court. This paper
+Norumbega Park, and another road called Norumbega Court. This paper will explore
-will explore how one man in the late 19th century, Eben Norton Horsford,
+how one man in the late 19th century, Eben Norton Horsford, combined Norse saga
-brought together two seemingly disconnected ideas into a theory for the
+and a mythical Native American city into a theory for the original discovery of
-original discovery of America, what motivated him to do so, and what he left
+America, what motivated him to do so, and what he left behind.
-behind.
 
 The myth of Norumbega originated in the 16th century, during the Age of
 Exploration. It was variously a town, city, or country, somewhere along the
@@ -30,25 +29,25 @@ Geography,[@KirsNor98, 34] the myth can be traced back to a conflation of two
 separate accounts. The first is that of Giovanni da Verrazzano, a Florentine
 explorer under King Francis I of France.[@GreeneLife37, 4-7] He was one of the
 first Europeans to explore the area around Narragansett Bay in 1524[@KirsNor98,
-36, 39], far distant from where Norumbega would eventual be described. However,
+36, 39], and recounted his experiences in a letter to the king. He described a
-due to geographical ambiguity at the time, his account would later become "at
+pleasant harbor inhabited by friendly and civil natives.[@KirsNor98, 39] They
-the heart of the Norumbega legend."[@KirsNor98, 39] He recounted his
+practiced "more systematic cultivation [of crops] than the other tribes," and
-experiences in a letter to the king, where he described a pleasant harbor
+were "very like the manner of the ancients [i.e., antiquity]."[@KirsNor98, 39]
-inhabited by friendly and civil natives.[@KirsNor98, 39] They practiced "more
+In the latter, Giovanni names the place *refugio*, "on account of its
-systematic cultivation [of crops] than the other tribes," and were "very like
+beauty."[@KirsNor98, 39] Despite Narragansett Bay being quite far from where
-the manner of the ancients."[@KirsNor98, 39] In the letter, Giovanni names the
+Norumbega would eventually be described, the Penobscot Bay region of modern day
-place *refugio*, "on account of its beauty."[@KirsNor98, 39] Civilized
+Maine, geographical ambiguity allowed his account to become "at the heart of the
-inhabitants became one of the core aspects of the myth, present throughout its
+Norumbega legend."[@KirsNor98, 39] Specifically, the mention of a "more
-evolution even as its exact location and size varied. The second account is
+civilized" tribe of natives would become a core aspect of the mythical city in
-that of Jean Alfonce de Saintonge, pilot on Jacques Cartier's exploration of
+all future renditions. The second account is that of Jean Alfonce de Saintonge,
-the Penobscot Bay area [@KirsNor98, 41]. Sailing up the Penobscot River, which
+pilot on Jacques Cartier's exploration of the Penobscot Bay area [@KirsNor98,
-he called the *Norenbègue*, he described "a city called *Norombegue* with
+41]. Sailing up the Penobscot River, which he called the *Norenbègue*, he
-clever inhabitants [...] The people use many words which sound like Latin and
+described "a city called *Norombegue* with clever inhabitants [...] The people
-worship the sun, and they are fair people and tall."[@KirsNor98, 41] These two
+use many words which sound like Latin and worship the sun, and they are fair
-accounts, Giovanni s *refugio* and Saintonge's *Norombegue*, eventually merged
+people and tall."[@KirsNor98, 41] These two accounts, Giovanni's *refugio* and
-into a single myth, canonized by Gastaldi, of an advanced Native American city
+Saintonge's *Norombegue*, eventually merged into a single myth, canonized by
-whose manners were closer to those of Europe than their neighbors.[@KirsNor98,
+the cartographer Gastaldi, of an advanced Native American city whose manners
-41]
+were closer to those of Europe than their neighbors.[@KirsNor98, 41]
 
 Eben Norton Horsford was a chemist working in Cambridge, best known for his
 invention of modern baking powder.[@JackHors92, 343] In addition to his work,